Using Comedy Best Practices 3 via Angry Black Girls on Twitter

I’ve been trying to make fun of the ‘independent’ black girls on my Twitter account…Excelsior! This continues a series where I apply the best practices learned from Mike Bent’s, ‘The Ultimate Guide To Writing Comedy.’

Techniques & Tools Used

  1. Set-up: Premise of the joke.
  2. Punchline: Line that gets a laugh.
  3. Tag: Another line that gets a laugh.
  4. Follow-up (Surprise) Tag: Yet another line that gets a laugh.
  • Rule of Three: Audiences expect a joke on the third beat.
  • Ellipses: Using …’s to add pauses when writing

Black Girls on Twitter

  • Set up: I’ve started following black girls on twitter; you guys do that? I’m doing it for purely sociological reasons.
  • Punchline: It seems they’ve organized themselves into tribes, like hashtagTeamFollowBack and hashtagNoCheapShoesAllowed or my favourite, hashtagNoGyalCanTakeMyManFromMe
  • Tag: Their dispute resolution methods are interesting too…Yo, shut the fuck up Hashtag…get out mah face…Suck my left nut #hashtag…putonsomechapstickfirst
  • Surprise Tag: Which is kinda hypocrital of her, because it was her that needed chapstick on this day. Black women can make many things look good…blonde fake hair, those ugly studs right here…not chapped lips though. It’s winter time, black women, if you have enough money for the Happy Meal…you have money for the Lip Balm.

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About Michael Jagdeo

My name's Michael Jagdeo, and I refuse to write about myself in the third person. I'm a Comedian from Toronto, Ontario, Canada. In addition to honing my stand-up comedy act, I maintain this blog and write the weekly comedy article for blogTO.com.
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One Response to Using Comedy Best Practices 3 via Angry Black Girls on Twitter

  1. I want to thank everyone for commenting. Honestly, the first time I scanned the comments I got kinda depressed because I felt like, ‘Ah fuck, that didn’t go well.’ But now after reviewing the comments, they’ve all come from a place that says, ‘Hey man, that didn’t go that well…but this did. Continue on that vein of thought and discard this one.’

    Thanks again for your help. It’s like having a comedy focus group with you guys, and you tell me exactly how you feel. I seriously take all of these comments into consideration.

    Michael Jagdeo

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    From:
    Julio

    His Message:
    I’ve just started following your site and I’ve noticed you are posting these short clips fairly quickly. I was wondering how long are you taking to write the jokes…and are you thinking about potential flaws with the material? Maybe take some more time to do some serious writing before posting. I know a several comedians…and many of them won’t dare put themselves on youtube unless they know their material is killer. It’s easy to get black listed if you’ve got poor material that is accessible.

    My Response:
    Hey Julio, From a traditional business perspective, you’re absolutely correct., it is easy to get backlisted because your brand as a funny person gets hurt if you post something that’s not funny. But keep in mind that the blog is about an up-and-coming comedian, and so trying out material that doesn’t work is in fact part of the exercise. I want people to see the bad stuff. I want them to see me struggle. I think that’s what makes the blog real, you know?

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    From:
    Steve M

    Comment:
    You were on the right track with the legitimate beef joke in your angry white twitter bitches routine. Stop doing black humor.

    My Response:
    Hey Steve, good to talk to ya again. I think you’re right. I’m getting a lot of feedback telling me the legitimate beef joke hit. I love black humor, but you’re right; I think I’ll stop. I think it’s because I love Paul Mooney and Richard Pryor so much. Nobody makes fun of black people more than they do. See, ‘Paul Mooney MC Hammer’ on Youtube.

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    From:
    Little Lupe

    Comment:
    What about some jokes about black peeennnnnnaaaaaaaaaaaaasssssssssssssssssss?

    Response:
    I’ll give you the best one I’ve ever heard from, ‘The Office UK.’

    Gareth: Alright, it’s Christmas dinner. Royal family… having a Christmas dinner. Camilla Parker-Bowles says, “Okay, we’ll play 20 Questions. I’ll think of something and you have to ask me questions and guess what it is.” And what she’s thinking of is a black man’s cock.
    David: Ha! Trust Camilla! — It’s not racist, is it?
    Gareth: No, no. Um… So, Prince Philip goes, “Is it bigger than the bread bin?” and she goes, “Yeah.” Charles goes, “Is it something I can put in my mouth?”, she goes, “Yeah.” The Queen goes, “Is it a black man’s cock?”

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    From:
    Biff

    Comment:
    What’s the deal with the blacks? I mean who are these people? (said in a Seinfeld accent)

    Response:
    (completed in said accent)…’I see them in line at the KFC…buying up all of the hot wings! Do they know about the drumstick!?’

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    From:
    Fred

    Comment:
    Ok, I’ve got to agree with one of the earlier comments that the Yuk Yuks thing was your best work. I know other comedians do the whole race thing…and it works. In this case, (and this is purely positive criticism) I think there is something off about the way you are telling these jokes. Again, maybe it’s your delivery. But it’s almost as though you are telling them as a fact, as opposed to a joke. Which is clearly making some people here upset lol.
    I think you need to revisit the tone you take when telling this kind of joke. Like the ‘if you’ve got money for the happy meal, you’ve got money for the lip balm’ comes off as kinda harsh. Overall the whole race thing is veeeerrrrry sensitive. Maybe lay off it.

    Response:
    I think they are right, and I also think you’re right. I think my tone is too serious when delivering the joke. Again, like I mentioned to Steve M above, I grew up idolizing Paul Mooney and Richard Pryor, guys who never held back when making fun of black people…but then again, they were black. I’m almost positive a black comedian could do the jokes I’ve written. Ah well…

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    From:
    Cain

    Comment:
    I like this direction. Lots you can use for material here. What about ashy elbows and knees? Or the size of their lips. Or the whole stealing thing.

    Response:
    Thanks, Cain. I like the format. The surprise tag is is making me take the realistic material into imaginary territory (i.e. when I make fun of the girl for being hypocrtical b/c it is in fact her that needs chapstick.
    Ashy elbows and knees, huh? How about: Some of these people look like they’ve been marinated in gravel. Oh man that’s harsh…but I smile and I laugh. It’s funny. Lips is hard to do without getting killed in real life…lol. What do you mean about the whole stealing thing? Like as in they call it Black Friday because the deals are so good that the consumers are getting a steal?

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    From:
    Martin L. King

    Comment:
    I had a dream….that you once told a funny joke.

    Response:
    I had a dream that you were more militant. I preferred Malcolm X’s, ‘…by any means necessary’ approach.

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    Apu – 11 hours ago
    Good rice, good chutney, good curry, let’s hurry

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    From: Adolf

    Comment:
    Hey how bout doing a twitter bit on every race out there. Can you do asians next? Puhleeeeease.

    Response:
    Hi Adolf – what’s it like driving Dodge Neon for eternity? Don’t tempt me about making fun of every race…
    Why is Chinese medicine so revered? People love acupuncture and Ginseng, yet it is those very remedies that have led to the world’s smallest penises and flattests chests. Have you ever seen that chart that shows what the pressure points are for acupuncture at the doctor’s office? If you could understand the chinese character set, you’d know they read, ‘Prick the eyebrow for small penis. Prick heel for…….small penis.’

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    From:
    Kwamsta Monsta

    Comment:
    Why did you go back to the black stuff? I mean, I get that it’s a ‘study’ but it’s really low brow stuff compared to your Yuk Yuks set. Would you do this bit in a place like…say Roosevelt Long Island? Where there are 95% black people? Or in Oakland? Black peeps steal pants right off your legs there you know.
    Would you even preform it somewhere like Jane and Finch? Also, maybe you shouldn’t use the word ‘tribe’ if you are planning to make fun of us.

    Response:
    Hey Kwamsta – you’re right. If you’ve seen my responses above, I’ve taken a bit of a shellacking for going back to it. I’m going to take a break from it. LMAO you’re right about tribe being a piercing reference. It wasn’t a racial word, actually. It was a social media reference a la Seth Godin’s book on Tribes: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q6vpBDFoMqc

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    From:
    Monique

    Comment:
    I’m doing a sociological study of my own. Is it right for a brown dude to make racist black jokes.

    Response:
    That would make a great study. You can eliminate confounding variables (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Confounding) by having brown comics and black comics deliver the exact same joke. If the sample size is big enough, and you repeat the study enough, the results could achieve significance.

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